Pride — a Triolet

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I may have bitten more than I can chew
The hubris of a Super-wannabe
Why, sure! That’s something I can do!
I may have bitten more than I can chew.
The problem is I fail to look to You.
Thinking I can find all strength in me
I may have bitten more than I can chew
The hubris of a Super-wannabe

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A triolet is an 8-line poem which a rhyme scheme of abaaabab. To further complicate things, line 1 repeats as line 4 and 7. Line 2 repeats as Line 8.

I love to challenge myself. Trying to write the 29 different kinds of poems found in “A Kick in the Head” is a perfect example.

Now the sonnet looms ahead of me, like Kilimanjaro.

Not Kilimanjaro -- which I thought I had a picture of -- but Mount Baker -- which I did have a picture of. Not quite as impressive, but still a beautiful forbidding snow-capped mountain

Not Kilimanjaro — which I thought I had a picture of — but Mount Baker — which I did have a picture of. Not quite as impressive, but still a beautiful forbidding snow-capped mountain

Sonnets need perfectly chosen words. I’m not sure I can do it.

I’m more like a short-order cook who slaps something together and throws it on the table. The mayonnaise may be oozing out unattractively, and some of the lettuce may be just a little wilted.

Not sonnet worthy.

So I’ll pray a lot today about that sonnet —

And maybe wait until Monday to try to post.

 

 

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3 thoughts on “Pride — a Triolet

  1. I love a nice Triolet, it’s a deceptively tricky poem to execute but when it’s well-done it leaves a mark on the reader. Even though the subject of faith is a serious matter, I think the slightly self-deprecating tone of this adds a lighter touch.
    Good luck with tackling the sonnet!

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    • Thanks! Writing the Triolet was harder than I thought — plus, after I wrote it, I read that I was supposed to have only 8 syllables per line. Oops. There’s that short-order cook side of me.

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